- We had already decided to change the front and back cover, we werent liking the design.
- Keep the cover simple the title "Generation Segregation" is the main point, its a catchy title.
- Need to sort out our citing.
- Make journey map slightly more emotive and add subtle insights.
- Need to add a few diagrams.
- Some of the hand drawn quotes are not so easy to read.
- We want to work on being concise in our writing so there isnt such long paragraphs.
- Add a bibliography!
One comment says we need to clear in the value of the elderly. We don't want to have to write a paragraph about why you should value the elderly and why they are worthy of not being lonely. It seems a bit unsympathetic and obvious. Maybe it just means that we need to make our journey map more emotive so the viewer empathises with Audrey. Add more photos of grandparents to get an empathetic response.
It also seems like we need a bit more about youth seeing as they are half our audience. We will add some statistics from our primary research about why youth arent visiting their grandparents.
Brainstorming layout possibilities. Where to put diagrams and in what order.
